Can someone share an example of a successful college essay?

Absolutely, reading real essay examples is a great way to get inspired and see that there's no single formula for success. I'll share a summarized version of a strong essay from a student who was accepted to the University of Michigan (a selective but not ultra-elite school). This example isn't about a headline-grabbing topic—it's about a personal relationship with the student's grandmother and learning to cook.

The student opens with a vignette: 'The warm scent of onions sizzling on the stove mixed with my grandmother’s laughter—a scent and sound I once dreaded.' She describes her reluctance as a kid to spend weekends learning traditional dishes, wishing instead to hang out with friends.

The turning point comes when her grandmother becomes ill. The student realizes cooking is her way of preserving memories and culture. She recounts one moment—messing up a complicated recipe, her grandmother reassuring her through laughter, and their shared effort to salvage the dish.

She ends the essay: 'Now, cumin on my hands, I understand that tradition isn’t just what’s passed down—it’s what we choose to keep.'

What makes it work: it's specific, intimate, and shows growth. Instead of telling the admissions reader that culture is important, she uses vivid scenes and food imagery to immerse us in her experience. It’s not about a big triumph or crisis, but an evolving relationship. We see her values emerge naturally.

Structurally, it balances storytelling (scenes, dialogue) with reflection, and there's a clear before/after. The voice is warm and honest, not trying too hard to impress.

Takeaway: Pick a specific relationship, interest, or moment. Use concrete details so your story feels real to the reader. Don’t worry about choosing a wildly original topic—what matters most is your unique perspective and authentic voice. Good luck with your first draft—you’ve got this!