Can anyone share good examples of college essays about overcoming a challenge?

I'm a rising senior, and it's finally time to start working on my personal statement. Everyone keeps saying that choosing a moment when you overcame a challenge is a strong topic for college essays, but I'm kind of stuck about how to get started. I’d love to look at a few examples that worked for people in the past or just see different approaches to this prompt.

If anyone has essays they used or links to (or advice about) memorable essays about overcoming obstacles, I’d really appreciate it. What made those essays stand out and feel authentic? It seems tough to write about something difficult without sounding like I'm just complaining or oversharing, so any advice or sample essays would help a lot as I start brainstorming my own story.
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Lydia Schooler
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Overcoming a challenge is a classic theme for college essays, and it's popular because real growth often comes from these experiences. The key is to use a genuine story and focus more on your reflection and growth, rather than just the challenge itself.

For example, one student wrote about their struggle with a speech impediment. Instead of just describing the difficulties, they focused on a specific moment: being asked to recite a poem in front of their English class and almost freezing up. The essay described their anxiety and embarrassment in vivid detail, but what made it powerful was how they explained pushing through that moment, what specific techniques they tried, and—most importantly—how it changed the way they empathize with others who feel voiceless. The admissions reader learned not just about the obstacle, but about the student’s persistence and compassion.

Another memorable approach is choosing a subtle or unexpected challenge. For instance, someone wrote about being the only kid in their family who didn’t speak their parents’ native language, leading to a series of misunderstandings and gradually pushing them to learn it on their own. The essay didn’t just say “I worked hard and succeeded,” but detailed small moments of embarrassment, humor, and finally, pride at being able to talk to their grandmother for the first time. Their voice and authenticity made it stand out.

To avoid sounding like you’re complaining, focus on concrete actions you took and how the challenge influenced your values or outlook. Balance vulnerability with self-awareness: you want to show how you've grown or changed, not that you see yourself as a victim. Steer clear of summarizing your whole life story; zoom in on one moment or decision that really mattered.

Try listing out several challenges—big or small—and jot down what you learned from each. Then, ask yourself which one best shows your character or a change in perspective. Often, the strongest essays are about challenges that weren’t "solved" in a traditional sense, but that sparked meaningful growth or a shift in thinking.

In summary: be specific, focus on growth (not just the pain), and show how you’ll apply what you learned at college. You don’t need to have survived something extreme; what matters is your honesty and insight. If you want help refining an idea or reading draft examples, feel free to ask. There are a lot of different angles to approach this question, so trust that your experience can be compelling if you tell it in your voice.
Lydia Schooler
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Yale University
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