How do you write a strong college essay introduction?

I’m a Yale graduate and college admissions advisor with over 8 years of experience helping students gain admission to top universities like Harvard, Stanford, and MIT. I’ve coached thousands of students on how to start their essays in a way that immediately captures an admissions officer’s attention, and the key is to open with something vivid, specific, and personal.

Instead of worrying about whether to start with a quote or a fact, focus on creating an authentic moment that drops the reader right into your story. Often, beginning in the middle of the action or with a specific memory works best. Think about a turning point, a challenge, or a moment that reveals something important about you.

For example, instead of writing, “Ever since I was a child, I’ve loved music,” try:
“At 2:00 AM, my fingers hovered above the piano keys as the rest of the house slept. I played the same chord, over and over, searching for the right sound.”

This approach immediately builds curiosity and shows you in action, rather than making a broad statement.

Opening with dialogue can work, too — just make sure it’s meaningful. “Dinner!” isn’t as strong as, “Are you sure you want to do this?” — the question my robotics coach asked before I presented our project for the first time.

Avoid starting with overused quotes, dictionary definitions, or vague statements like “From a young age…” These tend to feel generic and don’t reveal much about you. Admissions officers read hundreds of essays and value originality and personal voice.

Common mistakes to avoid:

* Taking too long to get to the point
* Using cliché openings
* Starting with an abstract concept instead of a concrete scene

One helpful strategy is to write the body of your essay first, then come back and write the introduction once you know exactly what you’re leading into. The best opening often emerges after you’ve found the heart of your essay.

Your introduction doesn’t have to be flashy — it just needs to feel honest, engaging, and give the reader a clear sense of where you’re taking them. Think of it as an invitation into your world. If it’s personal and specific, it will set a strong foundation for the rest of your essay.

Over the past 8 years, I’ve helped thousands of students craft essays and applications that stand out at the most selective schools, including the Ivy League and Stanford. To give each student the highest level of attention, I keep my caseload small — booking early guarantees a place. I’m currently offering free consultations for new Sundial families where we’ll review your goals, brainstorm essay ideas, and outline a clear application strategy. You can book directly through my profile.

I know this process can feel overwhelming at times, but you are fully capable of navigating it successfully. I’m always here to help guide you through it.